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Agent000 |
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Member mah kitty Level: 74 Posts: 874/1426 EXP: 3534241 Next: 119303 Since: 07-07-12 Last post: 2317 days ago Last view: 882 days ago |
The full first draft of my EarthBound-based screenplay is finished! Read plz c:
Wheeeee link ____________________ |AgentSplaturn| if someone uses an external hard disk to store porn on |AgentSplaturn| is it their sex drive? ( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°) |skyluigi| agent that's one of the best quotes I've ever seen on this IRC |
shibboleet |
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Fire Mario DROP TABLE users; Level: 123 Posts: 1670/4661 EXP: 20886084 Next: 345182 Since: 07-07-12 Last post: 1347 days ago Last view: 360 days ago |
Looks gerd so far ____________________ a |
Tahcryon |
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Embodiment of Time Can someone lead me to a non-capitalist clothing store? Level: 128 Posts: 3260/5087 EXP: 23814324 Next: 567376 Since: 07-07-12 Last post: 2202 days ago Last view: 764 days ago |
16 pages and counter, and it also looks pretty nice and interesting. ____________________
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Agent000 |
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Member mah kitty Level: 74 Posts: 878/1426 EXP: 3534241 Next: 119303 Since: 07-07-12 Last post: 2317 days ago Last view: 882 days ago |
Added quite a bit, so give it a read again! Follow the same link. Also, I added some new scenes near the beginning so don't just skip down to where you left off please
Also any specific feedback is appreciated. ____________________ |AgentSplaturn| if someone uses an external hard disk to store porn on |AgentSplaturn| is it their sex drive? ( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°) |skyluigi| agent that's one of the best quotes I've ever seen on this IRC |
MK7tester |
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Magikoopa I'm back Level: 104 Posts: 2078/3145 EXP: 11576059 Next: 286067 Since: 07-07-12 From: Dolphic Island Last post: 2596 days ago Last view: 2594 days ago |
You have gotten a little addicted to earthbound, but the writing is good No issues here. |
TheJeli |
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Member Normal user Level: 17 Posts: 29/51 EXP: 22847 Next: 1896 Since: 07-15-13 From: myass Last post: 3636 days ago Last view: 3344 days ago |
Someone needs to start a kickstarter... |
Agent000 |
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Member mah kitty Level: 74 Posts: 882/1426 EXP: 3534241 Next: 119303 Since: 07-07-12 Last post: 2317 days ago Last view: 882 days ago |
No, I would need permission from Nintendo to actually make a movie. And for the moment at least I doubt they'll give it.
There are a couple other screenplays based on the game that I've read, but I went ahead and wrote my own because of a few things: - One had just mediocre writing. - The other was too dark and gritty in my opinion, and also in my opinion didn't handle Ness and Paula's relationship well. - Both were much too perfectly loyal to the details of the game, which caused the pacing to be off, there to be a bunch of things that could be removed entirely, and restricted a lot of dialogue to strictly exposition to keep the movie a reasonable length. ____________________ |AgentSplaturn| if someone uses an external hard disk to store porn on |AgentSplaturn| is it their sex drive? ( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°) |skyluigi| agent that's one of the best quotes I've ever seen on this IRC |
Agent000 |
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Member mah kitty Level: 74 Posts: 888/1426 EXP: 3534241 Next: 119303 Since: 07-07-12 Last post: 2317 days ago Last view: 882 days ago |
Yaaaaaay wrote up a newer draft! It's about 13 pages longer, going up to the point where they leave for Fourside with the Runaway Five. The link in the first post has been updated.
Again, I'd really appreciate feedback c: ____________________ |AgentSplaturn| if someone uses an external hard disk to store porn on |AgentSplaturn| is it their sex drive? ( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°) |skyluigi| agent that's one of the best quotes I've ever seen on this IRC |
Agent000 |
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Member mah kitty Level: 74 Posts: 893/1426 EXP: 3534241 Next: 119303 Since: 07-07-12 Last post: 2317 days ago Last view: 882 days ago |
Another new draft! Continued the story up to Saturn Valley. Updated link in first post.
I'd reeeeaaaaaally like some feedback .___. ____________________ |AgentSplaturn| if someone uses an external hard disk to store porn on |AgentSplaturn| is it their sex drive? ( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°) |skyluigi| agent that's one of the best quotes I've ever seen on this IRC |
MK7tester |
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Magikoopa I'm back Level: 104 Posts: 2126/3145 EXP: 11576059 Next: 286067 Since: 07-07-12 From: Dolphic Island Last post: 2596 days ago Last view: 2594 days ago |
Is Ness's last name really sandhop? O.O |
Agent000 |
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Member mah kitty Level: 74 Posts: 894/1426 EXP: 3534241 Next: 119303 Since: 07-07-12 Last post: 2317 days ago Last view: 882 days ago |
Yes. Every name I've used except are the original names from the game. Well, except for Gangster Jim. I gave him that name xP
And the pilot that fires on the bus. That part was never in the game. ____________________ |AgentSplaturn| if someone uses an external hard disk to store porn on |AgentSplaturn| is it their sex drive? ( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°) |skyluigi| agent that's one of the best quotes I've ever seen on this IRC |
Agent000 |
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Member mah kitty Level: 74 Posts: 904/1426 EXP: 3534241 Next: 119303 Since: 07-07-12 Last post: 2317 days ago Last view: 882 days ago |
Yaaaaaaaaaaaaaay the first full draft is done!
... Someone read it plz ;-; ____________________ |AgentSplaturn| if someone uses an external hard disk to store porn on |AgentSplaturn| is it their sex drive? ( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°) |skyluigi| agent that's one of the best quotes I've ever seen on this IRC |
shibboleet |
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Fire Mario DROP TABLE users; Level: 123 Posts: 1797/4661 EXP: 20886084 Next: 345182 Since: 07-07-12 Last post: 1347 days ago Last view: 360 days ago |
I did.
It actually still looks pretty nice o,o ____________________ a |
TheJeli |
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Member Normal user Level: 17 Posts: 42/51 EXP: 22847 Next: 1896 Since: 07-15-13 From: myass Last post: 3636 days ago Last view: 3344 days ago |
Have you posted this elsewhere? Like here: http://forum.starmen.net/forum. Try posting it on a screenplay forum too so you can get some professional feedback. |
MK7tester |
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Magikoopa I'm back Level: 104 Posts: 2225/3145 EXP: 11576059 Next: 286067 Since: 07-07-12 From: Dolphic Island Last post: 2596 days ago Last view: 2594 days ago |
Yeah and there's probably a lot more Earthbound fans over there. |
Agent000 |
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Member mah kitty Level: 74 Posts: 919/1426 EXP: 3534241 Next: 119303 Since: 07-07-12 Last post: 2317 days ago Last view: 882 days ago |
The first draft is done but I don't think it's there yet. Expect some major changes and additions in the next revision! ____________________ |AgentSplaturn| if someone uses an external hard disk to store porn on |AgentSplaturn| is it their sex drive? ( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°) |skyluigi| agent that's one of the best quotes I've ever seen on this IRC |
Agent000 |
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Member mah kitty Level: 74 Posts: 942/1426 EXP: 3534241 Next: 119303 Since: 07-07-12 Last post: 2317 days ago Last view: 882 days ago |
Now the second draft is done! ____________________ |AgentSplaturn| if someone uses an external hard disk to store porn on |AgentSplaturn| is it their sex drive? ( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°) |skyluigi| agent that's one of the best quotes I've ever seen on this IRC |
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